Heartbeat

I chose the topic of death and also incorporated a few religious things in there as well, and I hoped to make the poem seem like a real event because that’s what it is about.  It is specifically about when ever my dad died in Paris the day after Christmas and I tried to include all the details in there for example saying “vivid moon” and “absent sun” eluding to the fact that it was at night time.  I really tried to have imagery but I didn’t want the images to come right out and present themselves like when I referred to flickering red and blue; I’m really referring to police cars.  I used colorful language and metaphors.  I made an attempt to include alliteration scattered through out the poem to help hold the listener’s attention.  I also used a kenning which was “the slum of the silver snakes” which simply means a metro station.  The poem came easily at first until I read my first draft and realized I let the great opportunity of writing something meaningful to me slip away so I went back and added my final details. Even after that and the class edit I changed it more and tried to make more clear which I think I accomplished, hopefully.  I found it difficult to make the poem come across clear since I new the topic really well.